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Oh dear, Lord, what have I done?
I spoke Your word and You took their sons.
Now the mamas and the papas all curse my name.
You took their lives, I took the blame.

Forgive me, Father, for I have sinned.
I turned wrath and pride against my kin.
So grant me the mercy of which You tell;
send me to Heaven and not to Hell.

Tell me, Lord, was this not wrong?
We cry and we bleed, but not for long.
Our short lives are full of pain
that we cherish joy when it comes again.

So give me another cheek to turn:
A pool for their rage to boil and burn.
Lead these lost souls right back to You
through desert sands that shine our shoes.

My flock is lost, they dance and sing
for a golden calf when You are King.
Will You punish them to punish me
and turn their songs to silence and sleep?

Life is a gift that You take away.
You stomp and storm and You close The Gate.
For all Your power and all Your might
You're fickle like a child and You're rarin' for a fight.
I finally got around to uploading this piece that was done for the latest :iconcosmosys-art: exhibition "Mythos." If you liked this, or even if you didn't, you should check out the rest of the release here: cosmosys.net/exhibitions/14/
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Pucca2000 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
This is just amazing. I love this poem so much. :)
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Trycona Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
I like the whole poem! But I found the last sentence a bit... well, strange. Like it wasn't the part of the whole poem.
(Bad English, sorry ><)
Despite the last sentence, I like it! I think Moses felt the same. I think, it was really difficult for him.
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Gymdawg Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your English is really good, actually. I admit, that is a fair amount of my own vernacular coming though, but there's enough of it sprinkled through the rest of the poem that I was hoping it wouldn't be too jarring. Apparently I was wrong.

And yes, I did copy that from my reply above. I'm busy at work and really shouldn't be commenting but I didn't want to wait so I'm rushing :p
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Avller Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
really interesting view... though it leaves kinda of a conflicted view of who Moses was. Here you portray doubt, which is totally normal and not surprising that Moses would doubt, but the Bible also portrays him as a sincere follower of God. So i guess i was wondering if there is a certain idea or thought you're trying to convey specifically?
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
then again, Moses did doubt when God told him to go and release his people, he thought God had the wrong person
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Jess457 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is good Clap 
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Ankaa-Phoenicis Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it sounds nice until the last sentence, which sounds kind of... informal or unfitting compared to the rest of the poem. 

But, overall, it's pretty nice. And speaks the truth. Sorta.
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Gymdawg Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I admit, that is a fair amount of my own vernacular coming though, but there's enough of it sprinkled through the rest of the poem that I was hoping it wouldn't be too jarring. Apparently I was wrong.
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the rhythm of this! :)
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regularshowandsonic Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Student Interface Designer
PFFT DIS STUFF LAAAME and it not even sunday yet >.<
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